Editorial Report b

The following is a come to life version of one of my rough cut sections.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” 

ENTER SCENE... SHOW TRANSITION WITH SLIDE CARD "I believe that we will win!"

Cut to highlights of women's games with narrator stating some statistics that the team has made in terms of viewings

CUT TO SHOT OF FANS CHEERING GOAL OF WOMENS TEAM WITH STATISTICS OF VIEWINGS OVER THEM

Sponsor Revenue
CUT TO PHOTO SHOOT OF ALEX MORGAN (SOCCER PLAYER) WITH NARRATION OF SPONSORSHIPS SUPPORTING THE WOMEN'S TEAM

Athletic accomplishments
CUT TO GLORY SHOTS OF TEAM WINNING OLYMPICS, 2015 WORLD CUP, QUALIFIERS, INDIVIDUAL AWARDS OF PLAYERS

Cut to U.S. federation statements that demonstrate how much the USWNT brought to the U.S. soccer federation.

“Re-edited Selection”

The re-edited section can be found here.

Questions

1)How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

For starters the re-edited version is finally brought to life on video. This definitely helps the audience immerse themselves into the public argument more profusely.


2)How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

It changed in that I removed some title cards mentioned above as well as some minor tweaks into the order that the section is put in.