Here is a vague outline of my project 3.
Audience Question: How are you going to organize your project?
Introduction
Demonstrate some highlights of the U.S. women's national team from the past 4 years. Then, go from highlights to statistics of sorts of money revenue to the five women players filing the complaint for inequality.
Section A: Demonstrate the hype the USWMNT has produced in terms of viewings, sponsor revenue, athletic accomplishments, and finally show much the U.S. soccer federation gets from the women's team.
Section B: Compare the U.S. women and men soccer teams performances in the last 3 years or so.
This well back up the claim the five women are making in terms of why they believe now is the time they get their fair share of the money pie.
Section C: Show information on the revenue both teams produce. Then, demonstrate player's salaries and bonuses of each team to give audience an idea of how both team get a share of the revenues they create. Show some counterarguments and debunk them or woven them into my final conclusion.
Outro:
Conclude everything from the previous sections to further prove that the current female soccer american players should get compensated more than their male counterparts.
Demonstrate some highlights of the U.S. women's national team from the past 4 years. Then, go from highlights to statistics of sorts of money revenue to the five women players filing the complaint for inequality.
Section A: Demonstrate the hype the USWMNT has produced in terms of viewings, sponsor revenue, athletic accomplishments, and finally show much the U.S. soccer federation gets from the women's team.
Section B: Compare the U.S. women and men soccer teams performances in the last 3 years or so.
This well back up the claim the five women are making in terms of why they believe now is the time they get their fair share of the money pie.
Section C: Show information on the revenue both teams produce. Then, demonstrate player's salaries and bonuses of each team to give audience an idea of how both team get a share of the revenues they create. Show some counterarguments and debunk them or woven them into my final conclusion.
Outro:
Conclude everything from the previous sections to further prove that the current female soccer american players should get compensated more than their male counterparts.
Peer Review
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your outline! While it seems a bit short, that can actually help as it keeps your information concise and easy to find.
-Joshua Smith
Hi Marvin,
ReplyDeleteYour outline looks pretty good as a whole. Let's start out with things that you did well. For one, you certainly understand your argument. This is essential to the composition of any argument. You also seem to have a wide range of sources that you (could) pull from. There are various aspects to this controversy, which you have clearly brainstormed and incorporated into your outline.
Let's talk about a few things you could work on. One, you need to add more detail into your outline. Stating the general events and/or pieces of evidence will make the construction of your rough draft difficult. Try and construct an outline that goes into more detail about how you will go about developing all of your ideas.
Another thing that needs attention is the development of your rhetorical situation. Your argument doesn't seem to have any appeal to pathos. The incorporation of emotion into your argument will help strengthen your argument. I may also suggest using more logos in your argument (i.e. why is it unfair that women earn less).
As far as evidence goes, I would recommend citing specific pieces into your outline. This will help you develop your outline and rough draft with more ease. Simply stating the evidence does not help the audience understand what the evidence actually is.
Overall, great job. Make sure to work on the level of detail/development of your outline.
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