Peer Review 1

For my Project 1 peer review, I reviewed Ben Macklin's rough draft (rubric can be found here).

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 Ben's rough draft on the topic of Lumosity was interesting. His draft made me think about the lack of vivid description of the stakeholders that my project needs. I think my chronological structure of telling my controversy is on the right track but might need just a few tweaks. 

In Ben's rough draft, I noticed that he sort of lacked some significant events which were occurring around the time of the Lumosity controversy. Also, Ben I don't think was that direct on the impact of the environment on which this controversy occurred (maybe I missed it, or the environment is the digital world having a key in this controversy mainly). 

What I found interesting about Ben's draft was his use of hyperlinks to send you to a piece of evidence of the controversy. That was exciting to come across and also, I am inspired by Ben to vividly add more description into the "why" of the stakeholders in my controversy as he did in his.