Local Revision: Pronoun Usage.

The following is an analysis of my pronoun usage for project 1

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1. Based on your analysis, how effective is your pronoun usage in Project 1? What does actively examining your pronoun usage tell you about your writing syle?
My pronoun usage is pretty effective. I noticed I did not have that many pronouns in my work which was quite alarming.

2. Are there any instances in your project where you speak to or refer directly to the audience? If so, how effective are these moments at creating a bond or connection between audience and author? If not, why not? Explain why you're choosing to leave your audience out of your writing. There's nothing wrong with that, per se, but you should be able to give a sophisticated explanation of your choices.

There are a handful of moments where I speak directly to the audience and I think it gives them comedic relief and a bondage that gets them the information across in a manner that they will remember in their minds for a long time.

My Pronouns

The following is a list of pronouns used for Project 1

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he (Emergency Manager)
their (people of flint)
it (Flint water)
his (Edwards)
his( Edwards)
it (River water)
he (Wurfel)
she (Mona Hanna-Attisha)
their (Michigan Government)
this (water crisis issue)

Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

 The following is about Passive, active, and active specific verbs.

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Active Specific :
corroding
renegotiating
boiling
consuming
indicating
handpicked
discredited
leaked
investigated
concluded

Active General:
led
declared
take
called
checked
began
take
decided
decided
help
use
using
using
listen

Passive:
take
take
made
using
would use
would rise
had said
had said
would show
has shown

1. Looking at the breakdown of your verb choices here, what do you notice about your current draft? Are the actions in your piece mostly general, vague or non-specific? Are the actions mostly vivid and specific? Are there instances of passive voice? Summarize what you learned by analyzing your verb usage in this way.
I realized my verb usage is not as specific as it could be in some instances like when I would use the word take or use.There are instances of passive voice and the verbs are mostly vague.

2. Based on this analysis, how could your use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.
They could be improved by using more precise verbs to explain an action in the project or synonyms of a repeated verb may also be taken into account when revising the draft.

Local Revision: Variety

The following will discuss about variety in my first Project.

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1. How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? Provide a cogent analysis of what the Rules for Writers reading tells you about your sentences.
I think there are a mix of compound sentences as well as sentences that are short and sweet. There are plenty of long sentences I believe in this project.

2. What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)?
I think each paragraph felt as if it would end with a cliffhanger towards the next paragraph. The transitional sentences however might have been better included in some paragraphs that don't have them.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?
My vocabulary is neither limited nor complex, it is somewhere in the middle. I think that is just enough to not sound repetitive yet not overdose the reader with vocabulary because that can distract them from the point of the content.

Brutally Honest Self-Assessment.

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1. How are you feeling about the project you just submitted for assessment? Give me your raw, unvarnished opinion of your own project overall.
I think my project was lame. I am not satisfied with the final product because of the fairly goofy tone I provided.

2. What are the major weaknesses of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be weak or under-developed.
I think my project is not as formal as it should be and maybe needed more vocabulary in it. It is entertaining though.

3. What are the major strengths of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be strong or well-developed.
I think my content clearly shows the beliefs of the stakeholders vividly with quotes and explanation of these quotes.

4. What do you think of how you practiced time management for Project 1? Did you put enough time and effort into the project? Did you procrastinate and wait till the last minute to work on things? Share any major time management triumphs or fails....
I totally failed time management wise...particularly with producing the content during production as I was unsure what the rubric actually wanted of me. I did not know whether to be entertaining or serious throughout the whole project and thus my paper is in limbo.

Local Revision: Tense Usage

The following is the usage of the various tenses of verbs in project 1

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Past
Said
Made
Has

Found

Helped

Investigated
Began

Commented

Pumped

Received
Called
Checked

Leaked

Drunk

Tested

said

Shown

Said

Caused

Returned

Concluded

Advised

Discredited

Announced 

led

Concluded

Heard

Decided

cooked

Stepped

Decided

Fixed

Declared

Declared

Located

Led

Appointed

Risen

Poisoned

Handpicked

Appointed

Sent

Realized

Constructed

Gave

Decided

Began

Began

Decided

Tally: Declared (2), Decided (4), began (3)

Present

Experiencing

Commenting
Using

Boiling

Running

Corroding

Appearing

Receiving
Concluding
Covering
Concluding

Asking

Renegotiating
Listen

Showing

Prevent
Coming

Disappointing

Consuming

Wind

help

Alleviate

Takes

Purchasing

Paying

Getting

Switch

Use

Find

Reporting

Appearing

Using

Shut

Use

Rise

Swallow

Get

Is

Going

Using

Raising

Realize

Trying

Indicating

Claims

Pulling

Tally: using (4), going (3), appearing (2)

Future
Take

Do

Change

Take

Take

Damage

Report

Test

Believe

Deal

Treat

Cause

Take
Tally: take (4) 
1. Which tense is the most prevalent in your draft?
The most prevalent is the past tense.

2. What effect or tone/quality does the current usage of tense have on the reader/viewer/listener?
It gives the reader an idea that what they are reading occurred in the past and the present tense verbs guide them through the events.

3. If you're using more than one tense in the draft (which is not a bad thing at all), do the shifts between different tenses in the piece make sense? How do they flow? Are there any jarring or dischordant shifts in tense?
They flow accordingly to the content being presented. So, if an event is being presented from the past, past tense verbs will most likely appear.

4. If you have not employed any present tense verbs in your piece - why not? Are there any moments of crescendo or dramatic action in the story you're telling that could benefit from being described or told in the present tense? Remember, present tense has an immediacy to it. It puts the audience right into the story as it is unfolding. It's a powerful technique. Could your piece benefit from that technique? How and why?
My piece has moments which involves present tense and takes the audience to that moment of the story accordingly.

My Verbs

Following is a list of all verbs used in Project 1

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Get

Is

Going

Has

Poisoned

Risen

Consuming

Wind

Located

Led

Appointed

help

Alleviate

Handpicked

Sent

Appointed

Takes

Purchasing

Paying

Realized

Getting

Switch

Use

Constructed

Gave

Take

Swallow

Find

Decided

Shut

Began

Use

Began

Rise

Reporting

Using

Appearing

Decided

Treat

Made

Cause

Using

Damage

Began

Commented

Raising

Pumped

Investigated

Found

Helped

Realize

Received

Trying

Change

Checked

Experiencing

Leaked

Indicating

Heard

Decided

Test

Believe

Returned

Report

Tested

Concluded

Advised

Take

Take

Using

Boiling

Claims

Caused

Running

Corroding

Appearing

Discredited

Commenting

Pulling said

Shown

Announced 

led

Concluded

Said

Do

Called

Concluding

Said

Declared

Concluding

Declared

Receiving

Deal

Covering

Asking

Take

Stepped

Decided

Renegotiating

Fixed

Coming

Disappointing

Listen

Showing

Prevent

Drunk

cooked

Most repeated Verbs:   take (5); decided (4) ;shown (2) said (3) ;declared (2) began (3) ;using (3) 

Least repeated Verbs:concluding (2); Get (2); Rise (2); led (2) ;appointed (2); help (2)