Editorial Report 15a

The following is a section of my brief conclusion.


Audience Questions

1)How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I think the outro-duction includes an better outroduction because of the music. This addition of musical content helps the audience feel more like they are truly listening to a podcast.

2)How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

The form changed a bit drastically where I included the same intro song into my outro so that the audience can recognize unconsciously that things are being wrapped up.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” '

here.

“Re-edited Selection”

here.

Editorial Report 15b

The following is a section of my brief introduction.


Audience Questions

1)How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I think the introduction includes an better introduction because of the music. This addition of musical content helps the audience feel more like they are truly listening to a podcast.

2)How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

The form changed a bit drastically where I included an intro song to give the podcast more flavor.


“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” '

here.

“Re-edited Selection”

here.

Peer Review for Sofia Haserot

I did my peer review for the wonderful Sofia Haserot. Here is sweet and simple peer review of her rough draft and what I told her she could maybe improve on.

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Sofia Haserot, "Open Post to Peer Reviewers."
• I made a copy-editing suggestion.
• I think I barely helped dear Sofia simply for the fact that I thought her podcast was near damn perfect so I did not really give her much advice.
• I incorporated some genre convention ideas from the Student's Reading book.
• I just straight up loved how Sofia managed to make the "scripted" version of a podcast actually work and sound relate-able. Sofia, kudos to you!

my comment (roughly): "Hi Sofia, Marvin here. I truly enjoyed your podcast. It was relatively small compared to the usual student podcast....but that's incredible!You said practically everything you needed to and I freaking enjoyed that!Um, let's see I would just suggest maybe at your conclusion adding a crazy story of you staying up late or something like that (which honestly is not necessary but just a thought).

Fantastic work Sofia!"

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

The following is a rough cut of my final project. I will be explaining some weaknesses and strengths about this project so far.

Author Response

Explain, with some specificity, your thoughts and feelings about the following:

• I hope you keep in my mind my attempt to cross over as much of the course as I could in terms of the 4 main projects.
• I guess some weaknesses is that there is not really a smooth transition of sorts neither is there any sound effects of any kind and the only music is in the introduction.
• I am very optimistic that it sounds unscripted since everything I did was basically not coming from a script of sorts or was completely staged.

The rough cut can be found here.

Peer Review for Jason Boley

I did a content outline suggestion for the incredibly gifted Jason Boley!

Select one of the following peer review activities. Consult the “Questions to Consider When Giving Feedback” section on Student’s Guide pages 71-3, as well as any of the suggested Student’s Guide selections.

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Jason Boley "content outline"

• I gave a content outline suggestion to Mr. Boley.
• I think I helped Jason get a wider idea of the possibilities that he could do with the video genre.
• I used the Student Readings book's information on genre conventions to give Jason a concrete piece of advice of what he could do on the genre of video.
• I thoroughly Jason's creativity and organization of his work.

My comment can be found here.

Production Report b

The following is a cleaned up version of what I plan to say in my conclusion of my podcast.


Audience Questions

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I presented more content to make it feel like a conclusion with more detail and more sentences.

2)How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

There was minor difficulties since I plan on just speaking casually instead of scripted for the podcast.

“Outline Item” 

Conclusion:

Overall, I hope to keep progressing in the world as a writer and manage my time better. Also, I hope to help those of my peers better.

“Adaptation of Outline Item”

Conclusion:

Overall, I hope to keep progressing in the world as a writer and manage my time better. Writing as I understand it is simply just another manifestation for being imaginative and producing wonderful forms of communication.  As I was proven in this course as I had to produce "writing" in many genres such as the podcast or the video or QRG or back to the roots of the simple essay. It gave me new reasons to enjoy producing work again as the typical essay standard of schools began to dull me and destroy slowly my inner creative freedom.

I hope to help those of my peers better in future courses thanks to the editing and suggestion skills I have developed through this course. The future of writing looks ever more so in my favor and that is a good reason to smile.

 

Production Report a

The following is a cleaned up version of what I plan to say in my introduction of my podcast.


Audience Questions

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I presented more content to make it feel like an intro with more detail and more sentences.

1. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

There was minor difficulties since I plan on just speaking casually instead of scripted for the podcast.

“Outline Item” 

Introduction

Attention Grabber: I'm an 80's wrestler when it comes to writing. I got only one good gimmick and it's managed to keep my tush afloat academic wise in every course that has required writing of sorts throughout my academic career. Like many 80's wrestlers though, I've had to adapt myself to a new era. The era known as college. *Gulps*

“Adaptation of Outline Item”

Introduction

Attention Grabber: I'm an 80's wrestler when it comes to writing. I got only one good gimmick and it's managed to keep my tush afloat academic wise in every course that has required writing of sorts throughout my academic career. Like many 80's wrestlers though, I've had to adapt myself to a new era. The era known as college. *Gulps*

The history of my writing can be traced back to when I was a wee lad dreaming of making movies, songs, comic books, the works so to speak. I would read mainly comic books, online sports articles, movie articles, etc. I never really read anything academic or formal like unless it is for school or it is something that catches my eye like say classic novels like Great Gatsby.

Time management wise, I have been getting better. I would always do things way ahead of time when I was younger then something snapped. I am now tend to procrastinate a bit often which is a really bad habit like drugs and rock n roll. Okay maybe not rock but still you get the idea.

Content Online

Here is an idea of how I am going to dish out the last serving known as my final project for this course.

Introduction

Attention Grabber: I'm an 80's wrestler when it comes to writing. I got only one good gimmick and it's managed to keep my tush afloat academic wise in every course that has required writing of sorts throughout my academic career. Like many 80's wrestlers though, I've had to adapt myself to a new era. The era known as college. *Gulps*


Section 1: Me as the Reader and Writer

Initially in my writing stages I tried to be the standard writer so to speak. I'd try to play it by the book, didn't really input my voice into what I'd turn in to my professors in elementary or early middle school. By I'd say halfway through middle school I began to realize through stuff I'd read like comic books and some online articles that "Hey, I find this stuff cool. It doesn't sound robotic, sounds natural". So ever since then I have always attempted to put my stamp on everything that I write, even if it is something academic which typically sucks the personality out of the content.

section 2: Planning and serving others

I usually begin any writing process by figuring out what is the purpose of what I'm going to write about. Usually on an essay or anything text based I start outlining a few things here and there and then I begin to compile a bunch of sources and/or ideas together and proceed to take a huge ton of time figuring out how to piece everything into a story.

Usually on text based stuff there aren't 2 drafts there is just one that is constantly evolving. That's the way I see it.

section 3: Genre & Time Management

I realized my time management sucked. I went through hell trying to finish so many assignments.

There would be countless sleepless nights, staying out on the street all the time not coming back until 3 am. It all was so surreal and just to work on English assignments. I never thought that'd be me. Or maybe I did since I am in college so.

Conclusion:

Overall, I hope to keep progressing in the world as a writer and manage my time better. Also, I hope to help those of my peers better.

Production Schedule

Hustle hustle hustle!Finals week and I got to have plan don't want to pull a muscle!Here is my proposed schedule for this upcoming week, better follow it or else I'll face defeat!

Date & time	What is to be done?	location	resources	Date completed	Changes made after completion and why
5/2/16	Begin to record	Main library	Laptop, mic, wi fi, software to edit audio, study room?	5/2/16 late at night	No changes will be made for this assignment as it is merely to produce as much audio content as possible.
5/3/16	Do extra takes of project	Main library	Laptop, mic, wi fi, software, software to edit audio, study room.	5/3/16 late at night	Add any further comments that could help improve the project overall.
5/3/16	Add effects and extra sounds to my narrative	SEL	Laptop, speakers, wifi, software for audio, study room.	5/3/16	Podcast is enhanced narratively and entertainment wise.
5/3/16	Finish rough cut	SEL	Laptop, speakers, wifi, software for audio, study room.	5/3/16	Rough cut will be at full completion ready for further evaluation.
5/4/16	Polish up rough cut	SEL	Laptop, speakers, wifi, software for audio, study room.	5/4/16	Rough cut will be in a state ready to be turned in.
5/6/16	Turn in assignment	SEL	Laptop, GREAT WIFI	05/6/16	N/A

Editorial Report A.2

The following is an edited out cut of my introduction.


Post Title: Editorial Report

Audience Questions

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

   
   

   I included some more information on the subject matter at hand.
   
   
   
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I included more music to the introduction than before.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” 

here.


“Re-edited Selection”

here.

Editorial Report B.2

The following is a report on the conclusion of my video.

Audience Questions

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added narration to the conclusion so that the audience could connect with the author's point.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added a faster editing which would help the audience feel more engaged into the matter.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” can be found here.

“Re-edited Selection” can be found here.

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers

The following is some insight into my fine cut of Project 3.

Audience Question: What are you anticipating the post-production process to be like, based on what you accomplished during the production phase?

I anticipate it to be tough work as always but I am prepared for it.

Author Response

Explain, with some specificity, your thoughts and feelings about the following:

• This draft is still somewhat rough.
• The video is poorly paced and a bit out of tune.
• The fine cut at least has an outline of sorts going for itself.

The link to the fine cut can be found here.

Peer Review for Bianca Aguilar

The following is a short and sweet review for Bianca Aguilar.

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Bianca Aguilar, Editorial Report 13b.
• I made certain recommendations about form to Bianca.
• I think I helped her establish how well she can use transitions from images to images.
• I used examples of good form from the Student Guide's Readings.
• I learned about how smooth her background music blends with her video and is not distracting.

Peer Review for Jason Boley

The following is a review on the work of my dear peer Jason Boley who is always there to help those in need!

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Jason Boley , "Content Outline".
• I think I assisted Jason in just adding a tad bit more to his already perfect outline by giving him a suggestion on where his outline could extend from.
• I used some information on contextualizing information from the Student’s Guide readings to help Jason with his outline.
• I really admired Jason's craftsmanship with the manner in which he adds details to every single manner of his outline.

Reflection on the Catastrophe that is the final week of Project 3

The following are some of my thoughts on this unusual week that has been staying up late at the library just to finish up this project 3.

Audience Questions

1)What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some successes were me being able to rent another Mac book from the Health Sciences Library and being able to use the iMovie program to successfully cut out the video. Also...I turned in the video!

2)What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some challenges were figuring out how to edit the video in a manner in which would be informative yet entertaining to the viewer that was a key thing to me. Another thing was being able to find a library which had mac laptops available since they are always unavailable for rent.

3)How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

Next week sounds pretty exciting since it will be the last project of the semester horrrray! I am looking forward to work on the podcast genre and see how challenging the last project will be.

4)How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I feel I could have improved more on the project such as more sound, better explanation of certain things, but I am proud of the style in which I decided to format the video.