Editorial Report A.2

The following is an edited out cut of my introduction.


Post Title: Editorial Report

Audience Questions

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

   
   

   I included some more information on the subject matter at hand.
   
   
   
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I included more music to the introduction than before.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” 

here.


“Re-edited Selection”

here.

Editorial Report B.2

The following is a report on the conclusion of my video.

Audience Questions

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added narration to the conclusion so that the audience could connect with the author's point.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added a faster editing which would help the audience feel more engaged into the matter.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” can be found here.

“Re-edited Selection” can be found here.

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers

The following is some insight into my fine cut of Project 3.

Audience Question: What are you anticipating the post-production process to be like, based on what you accomplished during the production phase?

I anticipate it to be tough work as always but I am prepared for it.

Author Response

Explain, with some specificity, your thoughts and feelings about the following:

• This draft is still somewhat rough.
• The video is poorly paced and a bit out of tune.
• The fine cut at least has an outline of sorts going for itself.

The link to the fine cut can be found here.

Peer Review for Bianca Aguilar

The following is a short and sweet review for Bianca Aguilar.

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Bianca Aguilar, Editorial Report 13b.
• I made certain recommendations about form to Bianca.
• I think I helped her establish how well she can use transitions from images to images.
• I used examples of good form from the Student Guide's Readings.
• I learned about how smooth her background music blends with her video and is not distracting.

Peer Review for Jason Boley

The following is a review on the work of my dear peer Jason Boley who is always there to help those in need!

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• Jason Boley , "Content Outline".
• I think I assisted Jason in just adding a tad bit more to his already perfect outline by giving him a suggestion on where his outline could extend from.
• I used some information on contextualizing information from the Student’s Guide readings to help Jason with his outline.
• I really admired Jason's craftsmanship with the manner in which he adds details to every single manner of his outline.

Reflection on the Catastrophe that is the final week of Project 3

The following are some of my thoughts on this unusual week that has been staying up late at the library just to finish up this project 3.

Audience Questions

1)What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some successes were me being able to rent another Mac book from the Health Sciences Library and being able to use the iMovie program to successfully cut out the video. Also...I turned in the video!

2)What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some challenges were figuring out how to edit the video in a manner in which would be informative yet entertaining to the viewer that was a key thing to me. Another thing was being able to find a library which had mac laptops available since they are always unavailable for rent.

3)How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

Next week sounds pretty exciting since it will be the last project of the semester horrrray! I am looking forward to work on the podcast genre and see how challenging the last project will be.

4)How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I feel I could have improved more on the project such as more sound, better explanation of certain things, but I am proud of the style in which I decided to format the video.

Editorial Report b

The following is a come to life version of one of my rough cut sections.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” 

ENTER SCENE... SHOW TRANSITION WITH SLIDE CARD "I believe that we will win!"

Cut to highlights of women's games with narrator stating some statistics that the team has made in terms of viewings

CUT TO SHOT OF FANS CHEERING GOAL OF WOMENS TEAM WITH STATISTICS OF VIEWINGS OVER THEM

Sponsor Revenue
CUT TO PHOTO SHOOT OF ALEX MORGAN (SOCCER PLAYER) WITH NARRATION OF SPONSORSHIPS SUPPORTING THE WOMEN'S TEAM

Athletic accomplishments
CUT TO GLORY SHOTS OF TEAM WINNING OLYMPICS, 2015 WORLD CUP, QUALIFIERS, INDIVIDUAL AWARDS OF PLAYERS

Cut to U.S. federation statements that demonstrate how much the USWNT brought to the U.S. soccer federation.

“Re-edited Selection”

The re-edited section can be found here.

Questions

1)How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

For starters the re-edited version is finally brought to life on video. This definitely helps the audience immerse themselves into the public argument more profusely.


2)How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

It changed in that I removed some title cards mentioned above as well as some minor tweaks into the order that the section is put in.

Editorial Report a)

The following is a come to life version of one of my rough cut sections.

“Selection from ‘Rough Cut’” 

TRANSITION INTO NEXT SECTION

CARD: "U.S. Men v. Women past 3 years"

Demonstrate side by side comparison of both teams performances in the following order: Olympics, World cup...

GO INTO SPECIFICS OF WORLD CUP 2014 AND 2015 WOMEN'S

SHOW GROUP STAGE GAMES OF BOTH TEAMS SIDE BY SIDE

GO TO ROUND OF 16..STILL SIDE BY SIDE

GO TO QUARTER FINALS...AT THIS POINT, THE SIDE SHOWING THE MEN'S CUP RUN IS BLANK BECAUSE THEY NEVER MADE IT TO THAT ROUND IN BRAZIL 2014...
THEN SHOW SEMI FINALS.....THEN FINAL...THEN SHOW WOMEN LIFTING TROPHY AND MEN DEFEATED ON THE FIELD

Head to next competition.....OFFICIAL FRIENDLIES....
SIDE BY SIDE COMPARISON AGAIN.... SHOW HIGHLIGHTS OF MATCHES THROUGHOUT THE YEAR OF BOTH TEAMS THEN TALLY UP TOTAL RESULTS OF BOTH TEAMS ON FRIENDLIES...

next comparison....OLYMPICS LONDON 2012

SIDE BY SIDE SHOT OF BOTH MEN AND WOMEN PROGRESSION IN CUP RUN....
.....WITH WOMEN HOLDING GOLD ON THEIR SIDE AND MEN'S SIDE LEFT BLANK AS THEY DID NOT QUALIFY AT ALL

“Re-edited Selection”

The re-edited section can be found here.

Questions

1)How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

For starters the re-edited version is finally brought to life on video. This definitely helps the audience immerse themselves into the public argument more profusely.


2)How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I may have demonstrated the comparison in a different form than side by side.

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

The following is a bit of information onto the rough cut of my video project 3. It is so rough I believe I do not have any sound mixed into the film and the video is somewhat difficult to follow.

Author Response

Explain, with some specificity, your thoughts and feelings about the following:

• I would like to inform that the video does not necessarily count any voice over as I hope the video could visually be able to convey to the audience what the argument is without any voice directing them through.

• Some major issues involve the video not containing any audio voice over of sorts and it might not really contain any counterarguments of sorts.

• It has great statistics and examples of what the argument is about and what it can be against.

The hyperlink to the project can be found here.

Reflection on Post-Production I

The following is a reflection on the roller coaster that has been the first phase of post-production.

Audience Questions

1)What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some successes was I was able to find a worthy movie editing program in the second version of adobe premiere. It was way more efficient than Windows Movie Maker. Also, I was finally able to rough cut together some clips into a somewhat decent video. Although, unfortunately I could not apply any voice over to that cut as of yet!

2)What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.


Some things that went was finding an alternative video editing program as well as motivation to continue with the subject that I had initially selected. At first, I was unsure about going ahead with the female soccer player's asking for more pay as I felt maybe the answer to the argument only lead to one conclusion: they get payed what they're worth. However, after speaking with Sean Bottai I found new reason to go on.

3)How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?


I hope I can prevent any further procrastination on this project as video editing has always seemed entertaining and fun to me! I think I will most likely overthink everything and spend too much time overthinking about the project instead of actually executing tasks that must be done.

4)How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I feel that the project is heading in the right direction. I feel alright about how I am managing all the evidence and clips of the project. I just hope I can edit the video properly into something easy to follow and read.

Peer Review for Tim Wils

I reviewed my academic counterpart Tim Wils. It was very intriguing to say the least. Onward!

Author Response

• Content Outline by Tim Wils.

• I selected to make an outline suggestion as I think I could make some comments on what he could use for other sources of women in comics.

• I think I helped Tim open a new area in which he could focus on in the role of women in comics.

• I incorporated some of the techniques mentioned in the posting of the reading regarding the different types of possible arguments such as how this topic could be a casual argument.

• I found Tim's detail into structure on the content outline very profound and well rounded.

Peer Review for Rashaan Malik

The following is a peer reviewed my classmate Rashaan Malik who is doing his third project on the 2022 Qatar World Cup bid scandal. 

Author Response

• Content Outline by Rashaan Malik.

• I selected to make an outline suggestion as I think I could make some comments on what he could tackle on the matter of the controversial bid.

• I think I helped Rashaan open a new area in which he could focus on in the project such as how the bid is scandalous because of the controversy that has been in FIFA.

• I incorporated some of the techniques mentioned in the posting of the reading regarding the different types of possible arguments such as how this topic could be a casual argument.

• I found Rashaan's detail into structure on the content outline very well built and conveyed.

Production Report 8a

Here is a piece of the attempt at adapting a piece of the body into script form.

Audience Questions

1)How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? 

I decided to format the script in a very descriptive format to illustrate the fact that what I am sharing will be converted and directed into a visual experience.

2)How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I managed to include visual evidence such as graphs and statistics which are common elements in a video essay.

3)How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

It went fairly well. I had some trouble figuring out in my head how to produce in words what I was conceptually thinking in my head.




Outline Item:

Section A: Demonstrate the hype the USWMNT has produced in terms of viewings, sponsor revenue, athletic accomplishments, and finally show much the U.S. soccer federation gets from the women's team.

Adaption of Outline Item:

ENTER SCENE... SHOW TRANSITION WITH SLIDE CARD "I believe that we will win!"

Cut to highlights of women's games with narrator stating some statistics that the team has made in terms of viewings

CUT TO SHOT OF FANS CHEERING GOAL OF WOMENS TEAM WITH STATISTICS OF VIEWINGS OVER THEM

Sponsor Revenue
CUT TO PHOTO SHOOT OF ALEX MORGAN (SOCCER PLAYER) WITH NARRATION OF SPONSORSHIPS SUPPORTING THE WOMEN'S TEAM

Athletic accomplishments
CUT TO GLORY SHOTS OF TEAM WINNING OLYMPICS, 2015 WORLD CUP, QUALIFIERS, INDIVIDUAL AWARDS OF PLAYERS

Cut to U.S. federation statements that demonstrate how much the USWNT brought to the U.S. soccer federation.

Production Report 8b

Here is a bit of the body of my video. I have decided to develop a script phase of the outline first then later this week develop actual video of such script.

Audience Questions

1)How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I decided to detail out how the visuals and audio would play out in this section of the video as in a video essay there is somewhat usage of mainly visuals and audio to create an illusion of knowledge to the audience.

2)How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

It fairly alright. I had minor delays figuring out in my head how this section of the video was going to play out in the actual script.

Outline item:
Section B: Compare the U.S. women and men soccer teams performances in the last 3 years or so.
This well back up the claim the five women are making in terms of why they believe now is the time they get their fair share of the money pie.



Adaption of Outline Item:

TRANSITION INTO NEXT SECTION

CARD: "U.S. Men v. Women past 3 years"

Demonstrate side by side comparison of both teams performances in the following order: Olympics, World cup...

GO INTO SPECIFICS OF WORLD CUP 2014 AND 2015 WOMEN'S

SHOW GROUP STAGE GAMES OF BOTH TEAMS SIDE BY SIDE

GO TO ROUND OF 16..STILL SIDE BY SIDE

GO TO QUARTER FINALS...AT THIS POINT, THE SIDE SHOWING THE MEN'S CUP RUN IS BLANK BECAUSE THEY NEVER MADE IT TO THAT ROUND IN BRAZIL 2014...
THEN SHOW SEMI FINALS.....THEN FINAL...THEN SHOW WOMEN LIFTING TROPHY AND MEN DEFEATED ON THE FIELD

Head to next competition.....OFFICIAL FRIENDLIES....
SIDE BY SIDE COMPARISON AGAIN.... SHOW HIGHLIGHTS OF MATCHES THROUGHOUT THE YEAR OF BOTH TEAMS THEN TALLY UP TOTAL RESULTS OF BOTH TEAMS ON FRIENDLIES...

next comparison....OLYMPICS LONDON 2012

SIDE BY SIDE SHOT OF BOTH MEN AND WOMEN PROGRESSION IN CUP RUN....
.....WITH WOMEN HOLDING GOLD ON THEIR SIDE AND MEN'S SIDE LEFT BLANK AS THEY DID NOT QUALIFY AT ALL

Reflection on PRODUCTION

Here are some pointers I have had on my production week.

1)What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some successes was managing to find some video editing software to use and managing to further acquire ideas for my video essay.

2)What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

Some of the challenges were figuring out how to mass bits and pieces of the project together as a video in all its fluidity. I was sort of overwhelmed at the task of working with video to present an argumentative standpoint on the cause of the female athlete's complaint on the gap.

3)How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

I believe things will go very slowly but I have hopes to work full track on the full project and hopefully whip out an awesome product!

5)How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I am feeling very ambitious about the project since I have always been intrigued by editing together a video again (since I have tinkered with such notion when I was younger).

Peer Review for Emily Bond

I went over the fascinating Emily Bond's production schedule and gave her some obviously useful tips from the pros (sarcasm intended)....enjoy.


Audience Question: How did you practice your editorial skills this week in peer review?

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• I reviewed Emily Bond's Production Schedule.
• I selected to make a resource recommendation on Emily's production schedule.
• I believe I aided Emily in his production schedule by giving him advice on what she could do to go through with his production schedule. I incorporated brainstorming suggestions of sorts mentioned from the Student's Guide into my feedback of his production schedule.
• I loved that Emily's schedule is very straight forward. Her schedule is like a classic phone conversation....no awkwardness, no fluff and straight to the point.

Here is my comment on her production schedule.

Peer Review for Ben Meyer

The following is a resource recommendation I made for my deer peer Ben Meyer (unintentional rhyme). Have a field day with it!

Audience Question: How did you practice your editorial skills this week in peer review?

Author Response

Perform the activity and then write a concise but detailed blog post that includes:

• I reviewed Ben Meyer's Production Schedule.
• I selected to make a resource recommendation on Ben's production schedule.
• I believe I aided Ben in his production schedule by giving him advice on what he could do to go through with his production schedule. I incorporated brainstorming suggestions of sorts mentioned from the Student's Guide into my feedback of his production schedule.
• I loved that Ben's schedule seems very detail and thorough which is something that inspires me to get my lazy butt off the couch and go execute my own schedule as well.

Below is a link to my comment on Ben's schedule.

"Hey Ben. nice layout of your work for the production schedule! 

Some tips I would recommend to you would be to carefully brainstorm out other possible scenarios you could have in your schedule where you can go through the content and formatting of your QRG. Also, I would advise to make sure you take time in your schedule to add more images and hyperlinks to your QRG.

Good luck!"